A Collaborative Effort: Silence and Emptiness

 

There have been several occasions where Mark (m60a3 tank) and myself have noticed that we seem to share the same style of writing and thoughts in the poems we post.

So, we tried a little experiment to see how it would turn out.  Actually, this is the 2nd one, but this is the 1st one that we decided to post together.

Let us know what you think.

 

Mind’s Silence

by Mark

Mind’s emptiness; without words sit I here in this silence.

Yet how be it then that the pen moves…

and words appear; quiet, as if by magic

on this bright sun filled winters’ day.

The seagulls wing against the azure sky

as the snow melts with the weight of the sun

bearing down as the hammer strikes the anvil.

With the heat forms the steel from the melted rock.

Oh what sight beheld to be wrapped in this which be a winters day.

The blanket blue, warmed by this brilliant sun.

So how be it then that my mind is empty without words…

in this which be silence.  

  

Heart’s Emptiness

by Rhonda

Heart’s emptiness; without feeling… this now hollow void.

Yet how be it then that this empty heart feels sorrow…

even as the beating of this heart void of emotion fills my ears

and a lonely tear makes a pathway down my cheek;

it’s salty moisture falling upon my lips that speak no words

on this cold and moonless night.

The clouds of darkness pass across the black sky

revealing one tiny distant star shining dim upon my heart.

So how be it then that my heart is empty, void of hope

In this which be sorrow.

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24 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. TOUCHED BY AN ANGEL
    Feb 05, 2009 @ 23:53:42

    Great minds think alike. i suppose 😉

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  2. Rusty
    Feb 05, 2009 @ 23:53:45

    Hi Rhonda: Well I loved them both. Mark\’s to me is like someone saw something beautiful and couldn\’t find the words to describe it.Your poem almost makes me want to cry as I feel the pain of a broken heart and lonliness. I imagine maybe others may feel differently but that is how they make me feel.Take care sweety and have a great weekend…………..Rusty ((HUGS))

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  3. Robin
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 00:05:15

    Wow, I love them both. And I think I agree with Rusty. I would like to read more, thank\’s for sharing.Take care, Robin

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  4. Joe
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 00:23:45

    Great collaborative work you both put together here!

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  5. Al's
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 00:43:19

    Lovely poems, you guys do well together.

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  6. Sue
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 00:58:07

    Hi Mark and RhondaThey are beautiful poems, what is they say " great mind think alike"Take careSue

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  7. Aussie
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 01:00:03

    Excellent writing by you bothBoth minds writing in a similar veinIan

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  8. nita
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 04:23:02

    both brilliant poems, seems lots of sadness there, I too write poems in times of sadness but they dont match the style of these – well done. hugs nita.

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  9. Barbara
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 09:45:23

    very nice mark and Rhonda.Take careBarbie

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  10. Beth
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 11:04:07

    Amazing!! You both have a great talent!

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  11. Dianne
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 12:22:16

    You are both a master of words. Mark\’s poem makes me think of silence as being a good thing and a place of peace of mind with out the clutter of everyday life. a time to think or not to think. A time when the heart speaks and a time to see the beauty of nature that surrounds us if we but take the time to see. We can feel without thinking . The heart sometimes gives us understanding that our minds can\’t. The magic that makes the pen move and write our feeling gives us Hope, even if we don\’t understand with our minds.I may be off base here, but that is my thoughts on Marks poem. Rhonda\’s poem speaks of how we in times of sorrow often supress our feelings because the pain is too hard to bare. It is how we sometimes survive when the life is sucked out of us. It is like winter, cold and numb and in someways death , sleeping for a time but even when we feel hopeless, there is hope for a ressurrection of life. Signs of this could be as simple as a lonely tear that may one day become a flood of tears which could lead to healing and restoration and Hope and the courage to go on and one day new life appears as spring comes and a new season begins. We can all relate to these two poems at one time or another in our lives.Hopefully all of our life experiences make us a better person and enables us to help others who may be going through what we once went through ourselves.I did not intend to write a blog here. I hope you don\’t mind. These are my thoughts.Love the poetry , especially when one has the time to read and think about what you just read. For me silence is goldern right now as I am often to busy. Thanks for sharing these wonderful poems. Dianne 🙂

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  12. Rambling
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 15:00:35

    I thoroughly enjoyed both yours and Mark\’s poems, Rhonda. I hope you put in more for us.

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  13. Sheila
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 18:45:52

    I love both poems. You are both wonderful writers. Thanks for always sharing your thoughts you jot down as poems.

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  14. Miss Beth
    Feb 06, 2009 @ 20:32:01

    Amazing and like Rambling said i hope to see more soon.

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  15. Here I Am
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 04:10:24

    Your styles are very much alike. I so enjoyed seeing them side by side. One almost flowed right into the other. Funny I had commented a few weeks back that one of your poems sounded so much like somelses. I\’d had Mark in my mind. I almost thought he had wrote it. So now I see just how I could have thought that. Both of you let the words flow with such freedom..Thank you both for sharing this…Hugs Carrie

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  16. Sherry
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 12:24:21

    Both of you have a wonderful gift. Keep it up and would love to see more.HugsSherry

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  17. Gill.
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 12:44:23

    You two are both very talented Rhonda. These are two beautiful poems, well done.Hugs Gill. xx

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  18. Adrian
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 12:45:38

    Probably Putin needs to \’hang out\’ with us! (lol)Have a great weekend,Adrian

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  19. Terry
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 12:51:51

    Wonderful Poems. You both have a special gift.

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  20. Mei's
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 13:05:40

    Thank you for your kind words and graphic! Hope you two can think it over. I\’ll try my best to fight my devil, not easy! Mei

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  21. Amy
    Feb 07, 2009 @ 13:09:30

    They are both great! Yours really touches home to me at times.

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  22. Anita
    Feb 09, 2009 @ 16:32:45

    OMG, Rhonda, you have an INCREDIBLE way with words. How gentle and lovely you write! I\’m waiting for more … XXX Anita

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  23. Unknown
    Feb 10, 2009 @ 00:21:06

    A poem is never finished, only abandoned… so can we expect more? Wonderfully written. :o)

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  24. Theresa
    Feb 10, 2009 @ 22:57:29

    Those were great! Bring on more!

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